skatergirl13: so yeah,i would just add some more detail,use spell check,ect. and you'll come out with a great story!13-04-27 22:01
skatergirl13: pretty good so far,but more details should be added. example: Lance's father ran toward Cronight,wearing a large red cape.the cape flowed in the wind as he drew near to cronight.he then stabbed the cronight,a look of anger in his eyes.13-04-27 21:59
turbo_tastic: Ehhhh...i could totally do better but its alright if your around the age of 12-13...or so...13-04-27 21:57